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Old 11-22-2005, 01:04 PM   #1
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This is a portrait of a high school senior that I've just done. 24"x18", oil on canvas. Any comments, responses and critiques welcome. Digital demonstration OK.

The photo of the portrait is more purple than it appears in person, and there are some glare speckles.
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Old 11-22-2005, 06:15 PM   #2
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You've done a wonderful job capturing personality and likeness. Very nice!

I would suggest toning down the background a little because the color is too intense/pure and distracts from her lovely face.



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Old 11-22-2005, 10:34 PM   #3
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Hi Chuck,

I agree that you've done a great job of capturing a likeness, and you've also captured more--the sweetness and directness of her personality. The only things you might want to re-check are the left (our right) eye, which is slightly too wide open; the top lid and lashes cover slightly more of the iris. Also the hair seems too solid and all-of-a-piece. I agree that the background could be toned down. It would really help if you could get some better photos. Nice work!

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Old 11-22-2005, 10:50 PM   #4
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Hi Chuck!
I concur with Cheryl and Alex's points, and it's especially so important to have a better reference photo. If you're able to posterize the images, you can also see that the shadows have their variations in values. I think learning about them will be most helpful for future projects.

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Old 11-23-2005, 10:01 AM   #5
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Actually, Marcus, I was referring to the photo of the painting, not reference photos. I think the reference photo is fine. Sorry to cause a misunderstanding. I'd love to see the real colors in the painting.
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Old 11-23-2005, 11:41 AM   #6
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Cheryl, Alexandra, and Marcus,

Thanks for your comments and suggestions. I have made a change to the eye so it is not open quite so much. I see what you mean about the hair looking like a single solid mass; I'll have to think about how to change that.

The color balance on the photos of the painting is off, and the background is a lot less saturated than it appears on my monitor. I'll take some new photos this morning and try to get truer colors.

Thanks again for taking the time to respond.
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