Ryan's Graduation!

Leopoldo Benavidez · 01-28-2002, 12:03 AM

Here is one I thought I would share of my son's graduation from the LA Sheriffs Academy. He has the painting in hand, so I probably won't make any changes, but your input would be much appreciated. Again this painting was different from my usual approach of the past, where blending seemed to take precedent. I was trying to lay down paint with evident brush strokes, using filbert bristles with little movement of pigment once they hit the canvas. I wanted them to be visible. I think I attained that goal and was happy that I could pull this off. I think there is some issues of using and following a photograph too closely, but it was the only source since he lives out of state. Background could be a problem as well! Please feel free!

Steven Sweeney · 02-03-2002, 09:42 PM

Really the only suggestion I have goes to the matter you've already raised -- the background. I think the piece would be very substantially enhanced with a darker background, contrasting with the light values in the fabric and flesh tones. I think it would also give the portrait a more "official" weight. That dark area at the bottom, around the sleeve, gives a hint as to the rich effects of increasing the contrast. I wouldn't lay in a uniformly dark background, though; let it grade up progressively -- but not substantially -- in value as you approach the upper half of the setting. Steal the portrait back, or take your brushes with you when you next visit your son!

Everything else seems to me to be very well rendered. It's possible that the photographic reference "hid" some ruddiness, some color, in the flesh tones, which seem here and there to be a bit chalky-white, but it's just as possible that it didn't, and since you're the one who knows the subject best, it's your call.

Very nice work.

Steven

Dean Lapinel · 02-13-2002, 08:05 PM

First my compliments to a fine portrait and to your son's accomplishment.

You are particularly adept at clothing and folds...the shirt and the flag are marvelous!

I agree with the darker background but I have one more thought.

Look at the light and shadows on theflag ....from the right? Look at the shirt...light from above? A little confusing but I like the light and shadow effect on the flag. Now my point. The face lacks the drama of the shirt and flag. It almost has the appearance of overhead lighting with flash. Even if this is what the photo showed, you could invent lighting to create more personality in the face...more drama, contrast, form.

Thanks for sharing your painting!

Chris Saper · 02-13-2002, 10:33 PM

Dear Leopoldo,

I have very little to add to the very thoughtful critiques already posted, except for a compositional point... I try not to cut off hands at the edge of the canvas...I think by extending the length of the canvas or altering the position of your subject, you could complete the white gloves, (softer edge control, with some settled negative space underneath them) in order to return the viewer's eye to the focal point of the painting.

Very nice job! Your son should be thrilled.

Kindest regards,
Chris

Leopoldo Benavidez · 02-15-2002, 10:53 AM

Thank you guys for jumping in on my post of Ryan!

Steven, the background for sure! It received the least attention!

Dean, good point The face really lacked the concern and patience that I gave to the flag and especially the shirt! Excellent points on drama and lighting.

Chris, yes I followed the photo too closely on this one and the compositon of the hands being cut off is certainly lacking the full capacity that a good portrait can reveal.

I really enjoy the lending of your eyes for this one for this is how one can continue to learn and to grow. Thanks again for the feedback and lessons for that next one! L