Kevin - Page 3

Patricia Joyce · 02-20-2004, 11:00 AM

I've been working on this third attempt this week and am stopping here to post. I feel I am fairly close to finishing the face but am having problems in a few areas. Any suggestions, as always, will be appreciated as I value your critiques more than you can know...

1. This is on Strathmore 400 paper which is much smoother and has been easier to work on, however the paper does not help with rendering the short hair (the toothier paper last time almost gave the very short hair appearance with no effort) Any suggestions?

2. Still not altogether happy with the mouth but am not sure why. I really wish my son lived close by, I would have him sit for me. He's in the middle of the ocean off the shore of Mexico (Coast Guard) and I will not see him until July (sad mom!) Anyway, I am e-mailing him these pics and he really likes this one... But there is something I am not seeing around the mouth.

3. Am I better off leaving the whole side in the full sunlight clean, or should I continue the attempt to turn the side of the face away from viewer?

Thank you, in advance, for your input.

Patricia Joyce · 02-20-2004, 11:19 AM

Looking at this online...do I need to darken the value of his check and forehead on the shadow side? Or is the upper lip too dark? I know the hair and shape of top of head needs work, too.

Jimmie Arroyo · 02-27-2004, 01:21 AM

Patricia, glad to see you are persistant. You know what a sucker I am of "unfinshed" work, so I'll say there's a look to this that I really like, especially the sunlit side. I wish the pic size and quality were better for screen viewing. They look too compressed, and there may be details in the original that we are not viewing.

It was that exact post from Juan that Mike put up where I learned about Stonehenge. It's a great paper to try, the light gray is my favorite. Good luck.

Patricia Joyce · 03-01-2004, 11:34 AM

I think I'm finished with this one. I struggled with the lip line, which I usually enjoy doing. I think it was because I know so much of my son's likeness, distinctiveness is in his mouth and I really wanted to capture that. I also think the contrast on the shadow of the chin is too strong.

I tried to push values but since the darkets plane is (our) right side of the front of the face I did not want it to look too square. I was trying to work around the flaws of photography. I would appreciate any input. I am happy with this likeness but there's no punch.

Thanks