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Old 03-24-2005, 05:48 PM   #31
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JImmie,

Very very successful!


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Meaning the lines that separate the fabric don't look right with the rest of the pic.
I love that you are paying so much attention to making the whole picture a success. The front of the shirt is perfect, the colors are perfect, I think you just need to adjust the values and their transition at the back fo the sleeve whene it joins the the back of the shirt, moving under the hair.

You are raising your own bar, and it will pay huge dividends for you. Well done.
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Old 03-24-2005, 08:22 PM   #32
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Hercules... Hercules! clapclapclap
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Old 03-24-2005, 09:11 PM   #33
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Jimmie, this is so beautiful, it just shimmers and glows and draws you right in. I love the colors and the design.

Here's a nit-pick: measure the distance of the stripe on the far left and make sure you are even all the way up with the edge of the paper. You might be off near the top. (I did a striped background recently and that was the thing that most drove me crazy.)

It just occurred to me that most of your graphite drawings of women have the women making eye contact with the viewer and your pastels so far show the women looking away. I'm going to go check this out and make sure but I think I'm right in this. Hmmmmm. Velly eenteresteeng.
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Old 03-24-2005, 11:49 PM   #34
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Bravo!

Jimmy, it's beautiful. The shirt thing is a piddlin' thing that I am sure you will fix in no time. I love the color scheme and the light on the hair.
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Old 03-25-2005, 03:36 AM   #35
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Jimmy this is beautiful. I especially like the blue light in her hair.
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Old 03-25-2005, 05:32 PM   #36
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Impressive art work

Jimmie,

Your drawing skills are particularly impressive and evident in this work. I am hesitant to offer any critical comments because this work is in progress and you are probably aware of the things that I may note.

My eye moves to the sharp contrast between light and shadow on the shirt seam in the bottom right. Unless you intend for the viewer
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Old 03-25-2005, 09:12 PM   #37
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Thanks all for the comments and advice.

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Thanks Beth, I'm at work and this made me laugh and made work much easier.

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measure the distance of the stripe on the far left and make sure you are even all the way up with the edge of the paper
Gotta admit, I never adjusted it because I hope it did'nt bother anyone cuz it did'nt bother me. Hmm, I just reread that last thought and it was'nt meant to be sarcastic just in case it sounded like it. It was meant in a sneaky funny manner like I was trying to get away with something. I would never speak to Linda that way, maybe to Beth.

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It just occurred to me that most of your graphite drawings of women have the women making eye contact with the viewer and your pastels so far show the women looking away. I'm going to go check this out and make sure but I think I'm right in this. Hmmmmm. Velly eenteresteeng.
That is velly eenteresteeng. Never fear, the next pastel will be dead on contact. If I can do it right, she'll look right thru you.

Edgar, the edges were bothering me, I tried fiddling this morning but only had a couple of minutes. Will get back to it in a couple of days. Thanks for the advice and breakdown, very appreciated. Welcome to the forum, looking foward to your participation.

Yeah, that's me with the drawing. I had another one in the finalist area. Thank you again.

Thanks again everyone.
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Old 03-29-2005, 10:49 AM   #38
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I hate to be the Scrooge here, but I do see some problems, with an otherwise outstanding "Jimmie".

You have two areas of visual conflict. The strong blue light on the hair, which I like fights with the violet shirt. The eye goes back and forth between the two strong colors and the face becomes seondary. I tried some color aid paper but it is hard to do it on a monitor.

Leave it for a while, take a few breaths and try this. Scribble colors on a seperate piece of paper and hold it up to the pastel.

What I may think might work is if the shirt goes navy and there is a sharp orange ( a complementary color) accent somewhere near her head . Her lips? Her cheeks? Look at some Gaugins.

The line in her bottom lip is a bit too strong.
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Old 05-24-2006, 08:33 AM   #39
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Huh?

The above post by Edgar Coleman was originally posted on March 25, 2005 - and is posted again today as an exact duplicate?

Weird.
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Old 05-26-2006, 01:38 AM   #40
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I don't know why it put it in again - so I deleted the second one.

That is "weird."

Thanks, Cindy.
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