Blue satin sashes - Page 2

Mischa Milosevic · 04-29-2007, 04:20 AM

I have made some touches on the forehead, cheek, around the lips and the lips, chin, chin to the neck and the neck and shoulder, around the clavicle dip. Put the two photos side by side in photo shop and see if you can notice the difference and if the difference appeals to your concept.

Christy Talbott · 04-29-2007, 08:26 AM

Thank you so much for taking the time to do that for me Mischa! I think the biggest difference for me is that the collarbone seems more prominent in yours, whereas in mine it's practically nonexistent. Your neck area definitely looks more graceful. I'll work on it and update this again later.

Alexandra Tyng · 04-29-2007, 08:59 AM

Hi Christy,

I just noticed you posted these closeups and that you have more time to work on this. How nice for you! I had thought, since you had to deliver it the next day, there was no point in commenting.

I do agree with Mischa about the older girl's neck, but you've probably already worked on it. As for the facial features, the modeling looks well done.

My major comments are on the setting. First of all, I love how you have painted the brickwork in the foreground. (I feel similarly about the stonework in your portrait of Campbell.) So many artists overdo the detail and the contrast but you have a nice feel for painting this kind of thing. However, the path leading back to the house appears to bulge and loses its illlusion of lying flat on the ground. The house wall, windows, door,etc., all lean to the left slightly. Is this just in your jpeg or is it in the original artwork? You should check that all the verticals are truly vertical by measuring in two different places from the edge of the canvas to the edge in question.

Did you soften the values in the background? In your latest image the house looks different. I like it. I think you could go a step further showing change of color/value in the grass as it recedes.

Christy Talbott · 04-29-2007, 03:23 PM

Alexandra,

Thank you so much for your comments! The verticals in my painting need some slight touching up in a couple places, but they are not leaning to the left in reality like they are in the photo. I must've tilted the canvas or something taking the photo, although a couple verticals on the right seem fine on the pic.

I'm working on the walk.. I'm going to lessen the intensity of the green as it recedes, like you suggest as well. I think that will make a nice improvement. In the photo it appears a fairly flat intense green evenly across the picture. I wonder if I had taken the time to notice while snapping the photos if it would've appeared that way, or if it is a case where the photo doesn't pick up on the nuances...

I'll post some photos in a bit.

Christy

Christy Talbott · 04-30-2007, 04:21 PM

The canvas is tilted a little on the easel. Here's a link to a closeup:

http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne...8902495&size=l

I'm having a difficult time getting a good photo. The contrast in the photo is higher than in the painting. The house doesn't appear quite that dark in the painting and the dresses aren't quite that bright.

Mischa Milosevic · 04-30-2007, 05:10 PM

I think they will be quite pleased with this. Sure, you can spend more time with this nudge this and nudge that but why. I do agree with what Alex mentioned in regard to the verticals. The verticals are a must!! There cannot be even a hint of slant unless the house is built at a slant and that is not likely.

A job well done and All the best to you.

Christy Talbott · 04-30-2007, 10:03 PM

Thank you Mischa!

I'm happy you think I did well. And thank you too for your help.

I can never resist fiddling with them though as long as they are in my house! If it changes much before I deliver it, I'll probably post yet another photo.

Christy