Blue satin sashes

Christy Talbott · 04-26-2007, 06:35 PM

I'm a little embarrassed... I still haven't completed my Campbell painting (and several others), but fortunately I've gotten a reprieve. In the meanwhile, this 30" x 40" painting needs to be delivered out-of-state on Saturday. I still have some work to do yet. Any c/c would be greatly appreciated!

Thanks,
Christy

P.S. Sorry, this is going to be very small. The site wouldn't allow me to go any larger than 400 pixels wide, which is small, because this is horizontal. I must have done something wrong...

Alexandra Tyng · 04-26-2007, 09:09 PM

No, Christy, you haven't done anything wrong in sizing your image! That is as large as you can go with a horizontal format. You could post some closeups, though. I would particularly like to see a closeup of the two girls, and maybe ones of their heads and other details. It's too hard (and too presumptuous) to try giving a critique without seeing more detail.

Christy Talbott · 04-27-2007, 10:21 AM

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Originally Posted by Alexandra Tyng

No, Christy, you haven't done anything wrong in sizing your image! That is as large as you can go with a horizontal format. You could post some closeups, though. I would particularly like to see a closeup of the two girls, and maybe ones of their heads and other details. It's too hard (and too presumptuous) to try giving a critique without seeing more detail.

Hi Alexandra, thank you for responding. I'm working on this today and I'll post the finish and the close-ups tonight or tomorrow. I'd just read some advice you gave to someone else about using a photo reference the same size as your art. I just printed out some new references of the girls. Up til now on this, I've just been working from a couple of 5" x 7"s of the entire scene. Doh! Your advice should help dramatically, although I still don't intend to get very detailed.

Mischa Milosevic · 04-27-2007, 12:01 PM

Ok, if I understood correctly, you do not have much time with this. Alex is absolutely right to be able to critique the girls one must have some closeups. Now, being that this is as it is, these are my suggestions. The center of attention, the girls you have defined quite well. The setting needs some adjusting. The brick wall and the steps for now look good but most things behind the girls could diminish in focus, value and temperature. As is there are elements that suggest that the house is at a distance but other elements like the walk suggest that this is not so. A sort of conflict between is and isn't.

If by chance, what I say is not that clear and this is quite possible, please say so. Otherwise wish you all the best

Christy Talbott · 04-28-2007, 12:00 PM

Thanks for responding Mischa. I'm sheepishly presenting this-- wish it was better. I actually do have more time than I said. The lady who is delivering this for me tricked me! She's not going til next week... she knows me too well, I guess. This is one of my so called 'impressionistic portraits'. I don't do much detail in their faces usually. There definitely still needs to be refinement there though. Anyway, here it is. I'm in the midst of adding some subtle highlights here and there in the background bricks.

I'll add more closeups soon.

Mischa Milosevic · 04-28-2007, 05:15 PM

Thank you for the closeups. Two thing that stick and both in the older girls facial features. I am sure that the outline below the nose her lips and chin need some adjusting. Second the neck of the older girl has to many value changes or should I say detail. I would suggest you just have a light and shadow are no detail of tendons and such things, only a indication of cylindrical form.

As the saying gos it is finished when you say it is finished.

Christy Talbott · 04-28-2007, 05:34 PM

Thanks Mischa, I'm bothered by the older girl's neck too (among other things). I say it's not finished!

Here's a link to see the image better. You can click on the larger size icon over the image.

http://www.flickr.com/photos/portraitgirl/475956293/

Please let me know if this link is unacceptable; I'll remove it.

I'll have another session with this and hopefully just one more update.

Mischa Milosevic · 04-28-2007, 06:05 PM

If you simplify the neck as I suggested and make the other adjustments I think it will be a good thing. If you have more time with this, then I would think on other things like the walkway. I think that there is to much detail sharpness and light on the walkway which takes away from the illusion of depth.