Promenade

Julie Deane · 07-04-2005, 12:19 PM

Hi -

Hope this qualifies as a figurative - how about a "multi-figurative"?

This was done in black and white intentionally so no it's not a glitch. I intend to do a similar one in color, but want to work with the composition a bit more.

My thought is to change the person on the right: have her body facing to the right, with her head turning in towards the left, to address the middle person, the primary focus. My thoughts are that this will create more movement, almost a spiral. Thoughts?

Richard Monro · 07-04-2005, 02:29 PM

Julie,

I love the feeling of movement in this piece and it has wonderful ethereal feel. The figure on the right feels "right" to me as is, but I don't understand the reason for the pulling of the ponytail. I think dropping the hand/arm of the middle person to break the connection with the hair will make a better composition. It will also make the 2nd person from the left a relevant part of the composition instead of being left out of the interplay between the 3 foreground figures as currently shown. Hope the comments help.

Julie Deane · 07-04-2005, 02:32 PM

Gee, Richard, I don't know. I love the quirkiness of the ponytail being pulled! It's so odd, so "kid-like", so unexpected....the two girls are obviously good friends if this is allowed. To me, it helps make it a fun piece. I hadn't thought that it would be viewed as a problem.

I'd be interested in knowing how others feel about this detail, too.

Debra Norton · 07-04-2005, 06:15 PM

I don't see the pulling of the ponytail as a problem. Girls do those kinds of things, and they look like they're having fun. Way, way back I have a vague memory of long braids being horsey reins.....

Lacey Lewis · 07-04-2005, 11:08 PM

Hello,

I instantly fell in love with the ponytail pulling! But I see how the composition is a bit linear. I think if the girl having her ponytail pulled were to turn her head around our way to look at the girl doing the pulling it will bring the flow back into the composition and make a sort of triangle with the 3 main girls.

I can't wait to see this in color!

EDIT: Oh, but I would hate to lose that wonderful "YANK" feeling!

Tricia Migdoll · 07-05-2005, 03:31 AM

I find this really interesting. I too like the ponytail pulling. ( perhaps it is a girl thing).
I find the fourth figure on the right rather dead.
The central figure seems to be relating to the fourth figure, so perhaps if you had her responding to the hair pulling action by having her hand to her mouth stiffling a giggle in response.?
Perhaps even bending over a little. she seems to have no movement about her like the rest of the girls.

Of course, I have no idea how this may effect the composition.
Compostition is a mystery to me.