I haven't really looked at your changes on the face, but, just looking at the overall values of the other large areas in the image, to be honest, I don't notice much of a difference from your previous version.
I would, personally, still do much more to smooth out the detail in the foreground and, especially, darken and flatten out the background much more. (There's a quote in another post on the forum that I definitely agree with: "The chief job of a background is to stay back".)
I posted your version from a few days ago, your most recent version and my suggested changes all in one image. Perhaps seeing them this way will help you see what I mean.
It may be too late to make changes at this point, but for future reference I think you'll find that if you think in terms of large solid masses of value your compositions will be much stronger.
Good luck!
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