Hi Joseph,
After my not-so-serieus comment some remarks about the drawing. My feeling is that on the right side (at the height of her chin) the transition, from shadow to the lighter area is a little bit too smooth. Perhaps some accents indicating hair-texture or structure wouldn't hurt. Maybe the hair can be used more as a way of making the composition stronger.
If you use some extra accents the overall appearance of the girl could be more impressive. I like the way the hair is drawn on the left side, how it falls on her shoulder.
There is something in the definition of the form of the cheeks that worries me a bit, but it's difficult to judge, without a picture of the model. Maybe it's useful to look in a book about anatomy to see how the muscles are placed, with that knowledge it's perhaps easier to place certain accents, or perhaps you can ask her to smile some more for a while, so you can see how the face is structured in the cheeks. I miss something in the definition of the cheeks. But I also have to say, that this is less the case in the second picture of the drawing you posted, but that second picture isn't really sharp, so see for yourself what you can do with this remark. Perhaps you can post a sharper picture, like the second one?
The shadow of the neck, perhaps it could be a little bit sharper, just to indicate more the distinction between the lighted en the shadowy area. I do not mean a sharp shadow, but just a little more accentuated.
The eyebrow, on the left for us, is perhaps too much of a line. Maybe you can try next time to draw the eyebrows with accents, not really clear lines, but as carefully placed accents.
Another comment about composition, perhaps the drawing could have been more balanced when you placed some dark accents below on the left-side. She is wearing a dark T-shirt (?) You could use that as a reason to place some darker accent somewhere, to make it a more balanced composition.
one last remark about the dark area in the background, perhaps it's better to extend that to the border of the paper. Now it is too much an isolated area, a compositional thing.
Perhaps I'm commenting too much on a spontaneous drawing, see for yourself what you do with these remarks.
Greetings,
Peter
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