Self-Portrait

[Piety Choi]

Graphic pencil on paper, 14"x17"

[Holly Snyder]

Hi Piety,

I like your self-portrait, it has a very introspective feel to it. Who is the image of in the background? Are the whites and darks accurately represented in your photo? It's a hard to judge with the dark stripe across the top and the yellowish tint of the photo. I think that softening the edge of shoulder on the left and darkening/adding some modeling to the shirt (particularly the lower left area of your photo) would help bring more attention to your face.

Regards,

Holly

[Piety Choi]

Holly, thank you for your very helpful comments. I tried to express my internal feeling onto the portrait. Background is part of another portrait of mine.

The photo does not represent the actual portrait well. I think yellowish lighting was part of the problem. I tried to adjust the color. I hope it looks better now.

I left blank the lower-left side of the shirt on purpose. But I will try to soften the edge of the shoulder and will post it again later.

Piety

[Cindy Procious]

Piety, this is very nice. You have a good control over edges, which is what drawing is all about, in my opinion.

I have only one suggestion regarding your left (our right) nostril. It is too light - squint down and it should virtually disappear into the shadow.

Terrific piece.

[Piety Choi]

Thank you for your warm encouragement, Cindy. I'll try what you suggest.

Piety

[Piety Choi]

Holly, Cindy and all:

I just have adjusted the drawing a little bit. I tried to darken my left nostril and soften a bit my right shoulder. I took a picture again but the photo is still not effective, Hope it looks better. Thank you for your comments.

Piety