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Patt,
This is looking much, much better. I hope you're feeling encouraged, as you should be.
As you mentioned, there are some problems with his mouth. The upper lip is too curvy. If you put the reference photo and the painting side-by-side and move your eyes rapidly back and forth between the two, you will see the difference. You've also pinched in the lower lip a bit near the corners of the mouth. The nostrils appear crooked in relation to each other. The ears should not narrow as they go up into the hair.
Also, watch the values. Already there are problems that will stay with you throughout if you do not tackle them now and keep watching for them to reappear. The eyelid creases are much too dark and hard. The neck is too dark and the shadow doesn't match the shadow in the photo, which means it is not consistent with the lighting in the photo. Thus it looks dirty. The ears pop out because they are too light. They should be the same value as the sides of the face. It looks as though you've given an exaggerated plumpness to the lips by adding too much shine/contrast. when someone is smiling, their lips stretch and thin out, so the plump appearance is not appropriate and may be adding to the problem you are having with the mouth.
These are just some things to keep in mind. I'm looking forward to seeing your progress.
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