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Hi Jerome,
This composition is really well-balanced. I love the horizontal format and the position and placement of the figure.
Such a nice composition deserves a little more attention to the values. I agree with Mike and Ilaria that the white shirt could use reworking. You have a very bright white and extremely dark shadow in one object. If you think in terms of value massing, the shirt should hang together and read as one element. Because it is the lightest value, the shadows in it should be relatively light. The wrinkles could also be simplified, especially in the sleeve nearer to the viewer. The very dark crease in the forearm part of the sleeve seems not only too dark, but out of place. I would expect to see some gathering near the wrist.
You might also consider toning down the light areas on the shirt , not only to bring the value down, but also to reduce the contrast between the light and shadow.
The hat or headscarf suffers from a lack of roundness. Judging from the light on the face, I would expect to see some light on the cloth as it rounds the forehead.
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