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Sorry to do this in piecemeal fashion but I'm just ducking back in here while some fixative dries . . .
I had the initial impression when I first saw the painting, and I still do, that the whites of your wife's eyes are too bright. You might consider graying them down ever so slightly.
You mentioned composition, about which two things occur to me. I'm not particularly bothered in this case by the "three heads in a line" set-up, especially since you've given the piece a kind of wide "vista" format, but in another case you might want to look for some triangulation of subjects, to encourage movement of the eye around the painting.
The other thing is, go to the image of your painting and cover up with one finger that blue-and-red drinking glass. Does it seem to you that getting the "weight" of that object out of there suddenly makes the space "airier" and encourages the eye to follow the bubbles through that space?
Just some more random thoughts . . .
Steven
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