[Will Enns]

In the absense of critical commentary, I will post the advice I followed, which was my own, along with the final result. For better or worse, this will be going to the client soon, as they are anxious beyond my expectations.

1) Push the back of Mr.'s shirt into the shadows more, to give an appearence of roundness.

2) Ease the transition on Mr.'s cheekbone to soften the boxy look. (People's heads aren't made of boxes, after all.)

3) Darken inside of her right eye to enhance a spherical appearance.

4) Soften edges of beard (his).

5) Top of (his) pants should be in the shadow of his sleeve.

6) Sign it!

I would also like to thank each of the people who pointed me in the right direction during the planning stages of this portrait:

-Peggy Baumgaertner, on 3-value massing,
-Sharon Knettell, who suggested simplifying the composition and coordinating the apparel,
-Chris Saper, who wisely suggested appearing confident to the clients, even if that confidence was still under construction, and who gave good advice on color coordination,
-Steven Sweeney, who didn't comment directly on this painting, but whose comments on earlier efforts made a positive impact on how this one was executed,
-and the several others who took the time to comment on various aspects of the composition.

Again, I believe I have made progress that could never have happened were it not for this Forum. Thank you Cynthia for your diligent efforts.