Here's where it gets really interesting; you found a model who is always available when you are, and who almost reads your mind when it comes to getting the position correct after a break
. I hope to see a lot of these.
The values are still too similar on each side of the face. The best thing about Baumgaertner's lessons is that you establish three values from the very beginning, before line, before detail. Everything else is built upon this structure. This might be challenging because of your vision issues, but it might be as simple as setting up a more obvious single source of light.