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Old 12-22-2001, 09:51 AM   #4
David Dowbyhuz David Dowbyhuz is offline
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I can see Karin's point, but I kind of like the vertical-ness of your composition, Jesse. Your subject's looking down creates a top to bottom movement of the eye (with a brief detour to the the bright area on the left horizon). Ordinarily, I'd feel that spot competes with your true center of interest, but the effect doesn't last; you're still drawn back to the seeming sadness of the little boy's face. (That little bush-thing is a bit distracting though.)

As you take the time to read through the various postings here in Critiques, you'll find more on receding/soft/lost edges. If you can track them down you'll find examples on how the softening of a jaw-line (especially the gentle contours of a child) can vastly improve your work.

I look forward to seeing more of your work (and perhaps a re-working of this one?). Good luck!
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