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Brian,
You've probably got this one down off the easel by now, but just a couple of notes . . .
You mentioned trouble getting a true representation of red in the reproductions, so this might be moot, but I guess I'd have lowered the intensity of the red in the lips. Also, the lips seemed "lined" with a dark red line that makes for a hard edge around the perimeter, giving the lips kind of a pasted on look. I'd have softened that line, especially in the area of the corners of the mouth. Some variation in the line between the lips would add interest.
The other note has to do with the width of the shoulder on our right. It seems short, compared both to her head and to the shoulder on the other side (which, given foreshortening, should actually be the one to appear shorter, if either does). I note that the frilly edge of the collar on our left is still some distance from the turn of the shoulder, whereas on our right it's right up next to the turn of the shoulder. This is producing a slight forward pull to that shoulder and throwing the placement of the arm a little off. I realize that doing anything about that now is going to be a big job. Just something to put on the checklist for the next 3/4 body profile.
[Later -- as I look again at the shoulder, I think what's happened is that the neck got too wide, and the collar was pushed over by that, and then also doesn't ever quite make the "round" around the neck and down the back. This would actually not be that difficult to rework, if you were inclined to do so.]
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